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I love how you started with "And". It's like i've been placed right in the middle of something - like being in the middle of that crowd where you're so drowning in peple that you forget what loneliness is. coated and layered in so many people... i love that loneliness flings ashes. that's perfect too. most of all, i love this faintly naive, confused 'blink' before we are blinded. like how i finished reading this poem and paused and then it hit me.
you've gripped me in, what, 27 words? not even particularly unusual words? how did you do it?!
I'm glad the brevity worked in this situation. I considered making it longer during the actual writing, but in truuth there was nothing more for me to say.
And I'm afraid I start way too many poems and sentences with the word 'and'. I excuse it with the fact that Blake did it too!
Thank you so much for your kind words. They really made my day.
Or that's the way it was intended, but it is open to interpretation.