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And sometimes, coated and layered
with tens of scores of others' eyes
we forget the word 'lonely' -
so when it flings ashes
we blink, and are blinded.
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It would be nice to be able to send someone tea via the internet.

Thanks :^nycterent: for the edit ^^

O_O A DD! Argh, most. Unexpected. Ever! Wow - thank you so much!
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Daily Deviation

Given 2011-04-14
Chin Up by ~Underground-Rogue stands out with its lovely brevity. "Crisp and crystal: worth a look, and worth a pause for thought." ( Suggested by ~Avallynh and Featured by `nycterent )
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I keep coming back to this poem and it's high time I left some form of comment! Basically, I'm really really touched. The brevity of this poem amazes me... how is it that you've said so much in so little?! :D good poetry makes me ache because it puts into words all these vague ideas no-one else has been able to clarify... you've done just that.

I love how you started with "And". It's like i've been placed right in the middle of something - like being in the middle of that crowd where you're so drowning in peple that you forget what loneliness is. coated and layered in so many people... i love that loneliness flings ashes. that's perfect too. most of all, i love this faintly naive, confused 'blink' before we are blinded. like how i finished reading this poem and paused and then it hit me.

you've gripped me in, what, 27 words? not even particularly unusual words? how did you do it?! :XD: you are an artist who has placed words in just the right order and just the right way to tug on my heartstrings. thank you very much!
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~Underground-Rogue Jun 2, 2011  Student Writer
Wow. This comment blew me away! Sorry for not replying for so long, things have been crazy!
I'm glad the brevity worked in this situation. I considered making it longer during the actual writing, but in truuth there was nothing more for me to say.
And I'm afraid I start way too many poems and sentences with the word 'and'. I excuse it with the fact that Blake did it too!
Thank you so much for your kind words. They really made my day.
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...I simply don't get it. The words are beautiful, but i don't know what they mean, and I feel like it's very meaningful. someone mind explaining to me? :D (I feel stupid...)
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~Underground-Rogue Apr 23, 2011  Student Writer
It's about how loneliness suddenly comes on unexpected and sudden, and that makes it hit all the harder. But...expressing understanding of that loneliness, implying that the intended reader is not, in fact, alone.
Or that's the way it was intended, but it is open to interpretation.
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:iconhemophile44:
truly beautiful, thanks for taking the time to explain it.
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~Underground-Rogue Apr 25, 2011  Student Writer
My pleasure; thank you for taking the time to read and enquire =)
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:iconxxmordredthedruid7xx:
This is beautiful! :heart: And congrats on the Daily Deviation! :D
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~Underground-Rogue Apr 17, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you so much, and thanks for the fav as well! A Daily Deviation was completely unexpected, to be truthful. I've pretty much just been bouncing up and down since that point!
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:iconxxmordredthedruid7xx:
You're very welcome! :D
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